This One Summer [excerpt]


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Page 24: “Boing … boing”. Product placement? :slight_smile:


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There’s a more extensive preview on amazon


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Too many silent panels.


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You don’t like the sunrise scene in Lawrence of Arabia, do you?


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Comic books aren’t movies. Thank you for illustrating my point. :slight_smile:


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No, but I’m wondering why you might need words in panels where a girl rides her bike around. I recall a lot of summers where not a lot was really said but things were just done. The beauty of comics is that they can visually present information without text telling the story. A lot like movies at times.

Offhand, how would adding text to the silent panels help and what would you prefer to see them say?


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For starters they could have added something like this when she is running the stick through the roadside grass:


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So what is the appropriate proportion of silent panels to ones with non-onomatopoeic text? Because it seems like it’s not even a quarter of the panels are missing text, and all of them are clearly conveying something.

I think it’s quite well done.


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Excellent point.
Fixed it! I did leave one panel where the discovery of the rock leaves her truly speechless. I thought this would really emphasize the magnificent element of nature and discovery.


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I love it when comic books have hand-drawn panels. It’s like nice wood trim…


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