I kind of get the point, I was wondering if the movie was a bit overwhelmed by the rewrites, and they were never able to find the focus or the voice of the movie.
However, statements like this: "A couple of 9-year-olds on a screen-free rainy afternoon would come up with better adventures, and probably also better dialogue.", undermine what real value the review may have. Of course the intent is to be humorous, but it makes me feel like the reviewer is taking sport in critiquing the movie, rather than giving an honest review. Jumbled at times and maybe a bit unfocused, the movie is still light years beyond the casual popcorn movies out there. Another way to look at it... maybe it is important to plant a seed in many, rather than drive home points that will resonate only with the believers?